Would love your input on my new website

I FINALLY got it published But I think I doubled my gray hair dealing with the domain transfer - I am SO NOT a techie

www.funfactoryfacepainting.com


Let me know if there is ANYTHING that needs edited . I would have liked to add a few small pictures on the service page but couldn't get them small enough I didn't have my prices listed on my old site , so this new and hopefully clear and easy to read.

anyone ? feed back please

hmmm hmmm hmmm... I can be too honest sometimes and I hate hurting feelings..

First, I love your logo...haha

I dunno, it just seems really.... boring. I would take that big ol' WARNING off of the front... kind of seems unfriendly. Let me know if you need some help with some things

I love my logo too -THANKS Suzy!
No I want feed back. Yes - kinda boring
like I said there is more I would like to do but haven't figured it out yet Do you think it needs more pictures or what?

I didn't like my last site at all, it was unorganized and I just didn't know what to do with it. I am happy with the fresh start but know it needs more.

Well the text is throwing me off a bit, it is kind of all over the place on the first page.

The rainbow colors in the 'service and rates' annoys my eyes...

Perhaps a FAQ tab?

Perhaps a separate Belly tab with pics and rates.

Perhaps I would do your top banner with a picture as well... (something I threw together quickly)


I will do a nice one if you like the idea...

And other than that, I think it is pretty good

Hi Kerrie! It looks good! Your designs are great, too (Love the raccoon!)

The only thing thing I noticed was a typo on your home page. You need to place a space between the period at the end of "I felt ready to jump in" and "I now have fairs..." Also, the last sentence of that paragraph doesn't flow correctly... (Sorry, my English major is showing) You could possibly change it to this instead: First, make your sentence end at "under my belt" (I'd also add an exclamation point, as this is a quite an accomplishment!) Next, you could say "Continual practice and the creation of new designs is my absolute favorite pastime!" You could also try to use Bold print when you are listing the events you have under your belt.... it automatically serves as a sort of service menu for you.

I hope you see that as helpful and not nit-picking!!!!

the first thing that strikes me is that while we painters like to see eachother's set ups, I don't know that customers will care about all the set up pictures on the front page?

Dear Kerrie:

There is a typo on your "Services and Rates".
There is an 'R' in Services

"Fairs and Festivals is is too light of a color and is too hard to read.

"fundraising and Benefits" should have a capital "F" in Fundraising.

Under "Birthday Parties, there is an extra space after the word theme, before the comma that should be taken away. A space should be added after design before the parentheses. Comma should be after girls and then Prates should be Pirates.
There is an extra space inside the ending parenthesis that should be removed.
I would remove the "design.(if time allows) and change it to
design...if time allows.
to avoid the inclusion of too many (parentheses)
or design (if time allows).

There is an extra space after guests, then it looks like you need the space added before please.
Give an extra space before "However"

Corporate Events and Corporate Sponsors (I would Capitalize the Corporate Sponsors, too).

add space after ages,

Prenatal Belly Painting
Capitalize "The" in The painting can be done before or during

Glitter Tattoos
last 3-7 days instead of lasts 3-7 days

I hope that this is not too nitpicky. I was the computer typesetter/computer illustrator in a small advertising company and I had to proofread everything.

I hope that once my website is ready to launch, FPF will help me with all those details that I will miss.

Oh, and I agree with Perry Noia about the set ups. (I would have never noticed that the first picture was something I wanted to see, NOT what a potential client would see. Good eye, Perry!)

Lisa
fesspenter

Is there a way to add a little more color to the website? The gray background and dark blue seem a little somber. Just an idea!

Keeping in mind that we make websites, and many home made sites make me cringe a little.... I like it over all.

The nits- Pick one font and stick with it. Pick a color theme and stick with it. Get rid of yellow text.

Re-write the copy on the front page- It is sales copy, and needs to be a bit more engaging with a call to action.

Overall, it looks nice. Not TOO slick (Like joe average can't afford you) Not too home made. The pictures show good work, and lots of happy kids and as long as you're not trying to market henna or glitter tats, it says what you do and does so pretty well. I do like the NAME and logo though.

So, mainly, pick a font, re-write a little to spice it up... Here's a SUGGESTION to take and choose from- by no means suggesting it is what you should use:

Hi, my name is Kerrie and Face Painting is my FAVORITE pastime so I decided to share it with YOU! Fun Factory Face Painting was started in April 2011 but I’ve been painting and involved with things artistic at an early age.

After hours of research and practice, learning my curls, swirls and my magical glitter-toss, I felt ready to jump in and share the miles of smiles that face painting can bring to the young and young at heart.

I can bring my face painting to your fairs, festivals, birthday parties wedding receptions, family reunions, baby showers, corporate parties, grand openings, school events, and fundraisers. I service the area in and around Grand Rapids, but travel to other areas is possible.

We use only the safest most child-friendly professional face paints. Your safety is out primary concern. We make sure that the products we use are real professional brand face paints that have FDA approved ingredients that are intended to be used on your skin and wash away easily with gentle soap and warm water. PLEASE BE AWARE- Craft paint is NOT for face painting, and non - toxic does not mean safe for the skin.

I look forward to bringing many smiles to your next event so... give me a call and…

GET YOUR PAINT ON!!!

I like your website. very clear images. lots of examples. good luck!

A big thank you to ALL that took the time to look, and help me make my site better
I hope to have time this weekend to do a lot of fixing- Just to get this far is a big accomplishment for me . THANK YOU !